You read an advertisement about in the local newspapers about a discount sale at a particular shop. However, when you meet to buy the goods you wanted, you found the sale had ended. Write to the shop manager. In your letter, -inform him/her where and when you went to the shop -what you felt when you came to know that the sale had ended -demand compensation for the goods you wanted to buy

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Dear
sri
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sir
Sri
, I am writing to express my dissatisfaction with your shop's
markting
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marketing
. I was
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about
shop's
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the shop's
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discount
by
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in
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the newspaper
what
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and what
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the shop has
posten
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posted
a sale news
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sale news
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. Yesterday, when I tried to use the discount ticket, the counter told me that
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special sale already finished
on
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last
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week. But I just saw
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news
on
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this
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Tuesday, and today is Friday, so
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is unreasonable.
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However
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I still bought the item on
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Thursday
. I am strongly suggest
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coherence cohesion
The letter could benefit from a more organized structure. Separate different points into distinct paragraphs for clarity.
task achievement
The tone of the letter is mostly appropriate, but it could be made slightly more formal to suit the context of writing to a shop manager.
task achievement
Ensure all parts of the task are addressed. The request for compensation could be stated more clearly and explicitly.
task achievement
You have provided specific details about when and where you attempted to use the discount.
coherence cohesion
The closing of the letter is polite and shows consideration, though it could be more formal.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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