The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.

The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.
The charts illustrate the proportion of
water
used for different purposes Namely industrial, agricultural and domestic
use
in six
areas
of the world.
Overall
, it is evident from the charts that North
America
and Europe
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the highest industrial
use
of
water
while
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areas
the
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most significant
use
in Agriculture of
water
.
By contrast
, domestic
use
is least
from
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other
areas
.
It is clear that
the agricultural
use
is most massively in
this
charts. In Central
Asia
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it stands in the first position with 88%
use
of
water
in agriculture- which stands in the first range.
However
, Africa, South East
Asia
and South
America
range relatively close with 84%,81% and 71% respectively. On the one hand, industrial
use
in North
America
and Europe is the highest with 48% and 53%
use
of
water
. In
other
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4
areas
, industrial
use
of
water
is less than others.
On the other hand
, in South
America
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19% of the
water
is used which is the highest range in
this
area.
In addition
, Europe and North
America
are relatively close with 15% and 13%.
Moreover
, in Africa, Central
Asia
and South East
Asia
are almost similar ranges the percentages of 9, 7 and 7.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • irrigation
  • domestic
  • industrial
  • regional disparity
  • economic structure
  • sustainable management
  • water-scarce
  • population density
  • urbanization
  • data trends
  • resource allocation
  • percentage distribution
  • extremes
  • variations
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