The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.

The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.
The pie charts provide data about the proportion of
water
used for three different purposes in different locations.
Overall
it can be seen that the percentages of
water
which is used much more in four areas for agriculture without North
America
and Europe.
While
it is much use in NA and EU for industries. Almost all countries
less
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use
water
for domestic purposes. Looking at the data sets,
to begin
with, farming,
central
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Asia
is the lead with 88%- first higher than others, 84% with Africa,81% with Southeast
Asia
,and 71% with South
America
respectively. As to industry, 53% of the
water
is used
Europe
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, the first higher user for production and 48 % by North
America
.
While
other four counties less used
water
form those. we show every much less use
water
for household work,south
America
is the much higher users than others.
While
Central
Asia
and East
asia
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were the lowest
user
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with 7% respectively.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words water, america, asia with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • irrigation
  • domestic
  • industrial
  • regional disparity
  • economic structure
  • sustainable management
  • water-scarce
  • population density
  • urbanization
  • data trends
  • resource allocation
  • percentage distribution
  • extremes
  • variations
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