The chart shows the division of household tasks by gender in Great Britain. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The provided bar chart depicts the comparison between males and females in spending
time
to do
some household tasks.
Females Change the verb form
doing
spends
Change the verb form
spend
the
most of their Correct article usage
apply
time
in
cooking, backing, and washing up; Change preposition
apply
however
, they less use it to do some maintenance jobs. Meanwhile, male
takes most of their days Add an article
the male
a male
for
gardening and taking care of their pet.
Change preposition
apply
Hence
that
Correct determiner usage
a
man
spends just only two minutes
in
managing clothes, washing , ironing, and sewing Change preposition
apply
where
Correct word choice
whereas
as
Correct your spelling
a
woman
spends much higher
than Correct word choice
more
it
, which is 25 Correct pronoun usage
that
minutes
per day. Further more
, Correct your spelling
Furthermore
in
cleaning and tidying Change preposition
apply
house
, Add an article
the house
that
Correct pronoun usage
apply
also
has
Correct subject-verb agreement
have
a significant differences
. Correct the article-noun agreement
significant differences
a significant difference
Woman
could spend 58 Add an article
The woman
A woman
minutes
where
Correct word choice
whereas
man
only has 13 Correct article usage
a man
minutes
on it.
Therefore
, woman
Add an article
the woman
a woman
also
uses only almost a
half of the Correct article usage
apply
man
Change noun form
man's
time
in gardening and caring for their pet, that
takes the Correct pronoun usage
which
man
almost 50 minutes
. In spite of that, woman
gives more time
for them to play & take care of their children.Submitted by rasyidrahma13 on
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words time, man, minutes, woman with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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