The chart shows the division of household tasks by gender in Great Britain. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows the division of household tasks by gender in Great Britain. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The provided bar chart depicts the comparison between males and females in spending
time
to do
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doing
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some household tasks. Females
spends
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spend
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the
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apply
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most of their
time
in
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apply
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cooking, backing, and washing up;
however
, they less use it to do some maintenance jobs. Meanwhile,
male
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the male
a male
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takes most of their days
for
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apply
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gardening and taking care of their pet.
Hence
that
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a
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man
spends just only two
minutes
in
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apply
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managing clothes, washing , ironing, and sewing
where
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whereas
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as
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a
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woman
spends much
higher
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more
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than
it
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that
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, which is 25
minutes
per day.
Further more
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Furthermore
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,
in
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apply
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cleaning and tidying
house
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the house
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,
that
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apply
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also
has
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have
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a significant differences
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significant differences
a significant difference
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.
Woman
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The woman
A woman
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could spend 58
minutes
where
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whereas
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man
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a man
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only has 13
minutes
on it.
Therefore
,
woman
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the woman
a woman
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also
uses only almost
a
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apply
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half of the
man
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man's
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time
in gardening and caring for their pet,
that
Correct pronoun usage
which
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takes the
man
almost 50
minutes
. In spite of that,
woman
gives more
time
for them to play & take care of their children.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words time, man, minutes, woman with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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