Question -Your manager has asked you to arrange a party for a colleague leaving the company. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter suggest a suitable date and time for the party recommend a venue propose the food and entertainment options that should be available

Dear Sam: I am writing to you
for giving
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to give
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an
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you an
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update about Fredy's leaving party. Considering that
the
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my
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last
day of work of Fredy is on
friday
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Friday
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12 August, we can make the venue on
saturday
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Saturday
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13 August at four
o'colck
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o'clock
in
afternoon
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the afternoon
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. I was thinking
to reserve
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of reserving
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a bowling table
were
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where
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we can have drinks, eat something and play bowling
matchs
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matches
match
. I believe it is a funny game.
This
bowling is very popular for their
giants
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giant
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hamburguers
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hamburgers
and good reputation in cocktails. The menu
include
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includes
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vegetarian and vegan options too. The bowling
name's
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names
name
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is Concord and is located
in
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on
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Hall
st
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St
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130 in Northbridge, which means that we have plenty of options
of
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for
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entretainment
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entertainment
around. After that, there is a bar
call
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called
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Firegum
that is
very popular for their live
band
music. That night it will
be play
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be playing
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a rock
band
tribute at 9 O'clock and Fredy loves
this
band
. The
band
's name is Roses and Guns. Probably, we could get a place in
this
gig. I looking forward to hearing from you. Let me know what you think. Marco
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single idea per paragraph
Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single idea. For example, the paragraph discussing the venue could be separated from the paragraph about entertainment options.
task achievement
Double-check the letter for minor grammatical errors and spelling mistakes, such as 'wich' instead of 'which' and 'O'clock' instead of 'o'clock'.
task achievement
You could provide more details about why the suggested date and time are suitable for everyone.
greeting and closing
The greeting and closing of the letter are very polite and appropriate for a formal letter.
complete response
The letter covers all the task requirements effectively, suggesting a suitable date, venue, and entertainment options.
suitable writing tone
The tone of the letter is suitable and friendly, yet professional, which is fitting for the context.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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