The charts below show the proportion of British students at one University in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.

The charts below show the proportion of British students at one University in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.
The charts provide the percentages of British
students
who were able to speak other languages
besides
English at one University of England between 2000 and 2010.
Overall
, the majority of
students
could speak Spanish, another
language
, or two other languages
those are
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which
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increased
at the end
.
While
as to no other
language
, France
were
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was
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decreased, respectively. There are no changes in German. 
To begin
with, Spanish stood at 30% to 35%, which is higher than other of the charts. Another
language
and two other languages
also
increased
with
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15% and 10% to 20% and 15% in 2000 and 2010, respectively.
Furthermore
, there are no changes in the number of German-speaking
students
with 10% for each.
On the other hand
, 20% of
students
could not speak no
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could not speak any
could speak no
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other
language
,
whereas
this
decreased to 15% at
end
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the end
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of the year.
Students
of the British University who
able
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were able
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to speak
Frence
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French
France
started with 15%, but it
also
lost 10% in 2010.
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