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The line graph below shows the avarage monthly temperatures in three major cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The line graph below shows the avarage monthly temperatures in three major cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
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The given line graph illustrates
temperature
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the temperature
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 in
celcius
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celsius
 in three different cities.
Overall
,it is clearly seen that Paris and Dubai experienced an upward
trends
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trend
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,
while
temperature
 in Sydney saw a downward
trends
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trend
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. In detail,
temperature
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the temperature
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 in Paris started at 5
celcius
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Celcius
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,
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apply
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and increased steadily to 20
celcius
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Celcius
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on
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in
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 July.The
temperature
 maintained the same level between July and August.The figure decreased steeply to 5
celcius
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Celcius
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 until December.In
case
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 of Dubai,started at 19
celcius
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Celcius
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, and climbed gradually to 31
celcius
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Celcius
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 over the next 4
month
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months
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.The proportion
rised
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rises
rose
raised
 up slightly to 36
on
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in
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 August.
Then
 the
temperature
 dropped dramatically to 21
celcius
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celsius
on
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in
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 the final month.
However
,the
temperature
 in Sydney started at 24
celcius
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Celcius
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,and
fall
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fell
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 considerably to 13
celcius
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Celcius
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 until July.The figure
growth
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grows
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 significantly to 24
celcius
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celsius
 over the next 6 months
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words temperature, celcius with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
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