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Writing Samples
Band 5

A good friend has just changed schools and is having difficulty fitting in and needs your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter • make suggestions as to how they could make friends • suggest joining clubs, participating in school activities • give any extra general advice

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Dear Salem, I hope
this
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 letter finds you well, I'm writing to give you some
advices
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advice
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 that help you become a social person. I
konw
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know
 it's quite difficult to make
a
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new friends, but when you understand the tricks people use you will have lots of relationships. The most attractive trick is sharing something with the person next to your seat.
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, a book you recommend
it
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for him or even a piece of candy.
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, you must assist your classmate if they have any
question
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try
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 to help them that makes them come to you
everytime
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. Do you remember how we
get
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 to know each other? it's by engaging at a Sama Club, and we become
a close friends
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close friends
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! So you have to enter the school club and be a powerful member who
provide
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 information and
engage
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engages
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 in
the
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discussions with other
memebers
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members
. I suggest that you ask the teacher to the
the
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class leader so that will
gives
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 you
the
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confidence.
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, open a group with your
classmate
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classmates
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 so you
could
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with
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them during summer vacation. Best Regards. Hamad

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coherence cohesion
Your letter is well-structured, but ensure each paragraph focuses on a single idea for better clarity.
task achievement
Consider addressing specific steps or activities your friend can take to make friends more effectively.
task achievement
Some grammatical inaccuracies can affect clarity. For instance, 'I konw' should be 'I know' and 'Do you remember how we get to know each other?' should be 'Do you remember how we got to know each other?'.
suitable writing tone
Your tone is friendly and supportive, which is very appropriate for the context.
complete response
You provided multiple pieces of advice, which shows comprehensive thinking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • introduce yourself
  • genuine interest
  • rapport
  • like-minded individuals
  • school community
  • volunteer
  • open-minded
  • comfort zone
  • casual setting
  • hobbies and activities
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