The graph below shows the average retirement age of males and females in six countries in 2003. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar charts illustrate the average retirement
age
of men
and women
in several countries in 2004 and 2008.
Overall
, citizens in Sweden became the longest in terms of taking pensiun
time in two different Correct your spelling
pencil
years
shown. By contrast
, people in France commonly stopped to work
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working
in
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at
the
early Correct article usage
an
ages
.
Looking at the information in more detail, in 2004 in Sweden, Fix the agreement mistake
age
men
and women
were still working until age
64 then
in
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apply
years
later, it became longer which was 65 years
old. Similar trends happened to every type of genders
in Fix the agreement mistake
gender
Netherlands
. In Correct article usage
the Netherlands
this
nation, in 2004, males occupied until age
62 whereas
females worked shorter one year. During 2008, the availability of taking
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apply
part time
or Add a hyphen
part-time
full time
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full-time
job
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jobs
of
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for
men
and women
were
63 Correct subject-verb agreement
was
years
and 62 years
respectively.
In 2004, inhabitants in France could be retirement in the 58-year old for both two genders. By 2008, this
condition has changed to 59 years
for men
. While
,
there was no difference between the average Remove the comma
apply
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apply
of
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apply
age
working of women
betwen
two Correct your spelling
between
years
shown. In addition
, because of this
, France became
the shortest Verb problem
had
years
of Fix the agreement mistake
year
working
. Replace the word
work
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situations
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situation
were
similar happened in ItalyCorrect subject-verb agreement
was
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, men, women, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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