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The map below shows the development of the town of Stromer between 1995 and now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The map below shows the development of the town of Stromer between 1995 and now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
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The supplied maps illustrate various changes
of
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 Stromer
city
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 from 1995 to the present. It can be clearly seen that the whole area has witnessed a lot of urbanization and
construction
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 of new facilities over the period. In 1995,there used to be a huge farmland which has been lessen in the southeast of the town recently.
Moreover
,several shops,apartments and one house have been added
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 the farmland at the moment.Another striking development is the erection of three shops and a school in the middle of the region.Another notable change is the redevelopment of the forest in the east of the region between 1995 and now. It is interesting to note that a house was demolished and replaced by an apartment in the northwest of
the
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Stromer town from 1995 to now.Surprisingly,there
did not
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used to be
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an
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airport in Stromer
city
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 in 1995.
However
,the government has constructed an enormous airport in the northeast of the area in recent years.
In addition
,there was a large green area which had been covered by forest in the north of the town.Whilst,a new apartment has been built in the north between an airport and another apartment
todays
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today
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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