The graph below shows the comparison on birthrates in Sweden, China, Australia, and Vietnam per thousands. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The graph below shows the comparison on birthrates in Sweden, China, Australia, and Vietnam per thousands. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
The
chart
demonstrates a comparison of
birth
rates between four distinct countries over a 35-
year
period
,
comencing
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commencing
from 1970.
It is clear that
China has had the most dramatic
decline
in the number of people born,
whereas
Australia's
birth
rate
has changed the least over the entire
period
on the
chart
In 1970, there
are
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two countries that
have
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had relatively large and downward changes in their
birth
rates despite starting with a high
rate
of 25,000
births
a
year
, which are China and Vietnam. Vietnam saw a significant
decline
to just under 17,000
births
a
year
in 2005
,
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but still held the top spot in the
birth
rate
chart
. China,
on the other hand
, saw a sharp
decline
to just under 1,000
births
a
year
, ranking
last
on the
chart
In the same
period
, we can see a
fluntuated
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fluctuated
trend
of
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both Australia and Sweden in terms of
birth
rates. The
birth
rate
in Australia has declined slightly and remained stable at around 15,000
births
per
year
in the first three quarters and ended at around 14,000
births
at the end
of the
period
. In Sweden,
on the other hand
, there was an uneven change from
year
to
year
over the entire
period
, but there was a
decline
eventually, from 12 thousand
births
a
year
to only 10 thousand
births
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