The graph below shows the comparison on birthrates in Sweden, China, Australia, and Vietnam per thousands. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The
chart
demonstrates a comparison of birth
rates between four distinct countries over a 35-year
period
, comencing
from 1970. Correct your spelling
commencing
It is clear that
China has had the most dramatic decline
in the number of people born, whereas
Australia's birth
rate
has changed the least over the entire period
on the chart
In 1970, there are
two countries that Wrong verb form
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have
had relatively large and downward changes in their Unnecessary verb
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birth
rates despite starting with a high rate
of 25,000 births
a year
, which are China and Vietnam. Vietnam saw a significant decline
to just under 17,000 births
a year
in 2005,
but still held the top spot in the Remove the comma
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birth
rate
chart
. China, on the other hand
, saw a sharp decline
to just under 1,000 births
a year
, ranking last
on the chart
In the same period
, we can see a fluntuated
trend Correct your spelling
fluctuated
of
both Australia and Sweden in terms of Change preposition
in
birth
rates. The birth
rate
in Australia has declined slightly and remained stable at around 15,000 births
per year
in the first three quarters and ended at around 14,000 births
at the end
of the period
. In Sweden, on the other hand
, there was an uneven change from year
to year
over the entire period
, but there was a decline
eventually, from 12 thousand births
a year
to only 10 thousand births
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