The graph below shows the proportion of four different materials that were recycled from 1982 to 2010 in a particular country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the proportion of four different materials that were recycled from 1982 to 2010 in a particular country. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagrams
shows
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show
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recycling statistics for four materials between 1982 and 2010, namely,
paper
and cardboard,
glass
containers
,
aluminium
cans and plastics.
Overall
, the volumes of
paper
and cardboard and
glass
containers
were volatile over the period
while
aluminium
maintained an up trend and plastics were nearly
stagnent
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stagnant
with only an increase of less than 5%. It is important to note that in 1982 there were only two materials being recycled,
aluminium
and plastic joined later in 1986 and 1990 respectively. In 1986
paper
was the most recycled at around 65%,
while
only one in every 2
glass
containers
were recycled. From that year
paper
cardboard
gradualy
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gradually
increased
their
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its
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volume to 70% by 1986, it recorded its highest volume in 1994 at 80%, meanwhile,
glass
containers
was
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were
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declining in the same period.
It is clear that
when
aluminium
started recycling it became so popular that it rapidly increased by more than 40% over
the
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apply
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time.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words paper, glass, containers, aluminium with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • recycled
  • materials
  • increased
  • paper and cardboard
  • plastic
  • glass
  • metal
  • significant increase
  • relatively stable
  • fluctuating
  • period
  • starting
  • reaching
  • gradually increasing
  • remained low
  • experienced
  • showed
  • greatest
  • proportion
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