Some people think women should be allowed to join the army, the navy and the air force just like men. To what extent do you agree ordisagree?

Women

said

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to

be joined

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join

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the army and the navy

force

like

men

. I strongly agree with

this

statement because of the gender equality and

multi-tasking

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multitasking

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.

This

essay discusses it briefly for the following reasons.

To begin

with,

women

should be recruited

the

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to the

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air

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Air Force

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force

and the

navy

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Navy

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force

due to

the

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apply

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gender equality.

That is

to say,

women

can contribute and service

to

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apply

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their nation like

men

, but

this

society easily

put

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puts

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label

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labels

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on

women

are so soft

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as softer

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and physically weak than

men

.

For example

, in the USA, many mothers and wives are working in the air

force

.

Therefore

,

women

also

have

all

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the

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rights

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right

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to serve their nation

by

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through

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defence

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the defence

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.

Furthermore

, multi-tasking is done by

women

easily because they are being mothers and wives simultaneously.

This

is,

women

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women,

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take care

their

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of their

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children and protect their families from any

harms

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harm

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, so they have

a

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the

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natural protection and defence skills as

men

.

For instance

,

women

can check the map

while

doing defence of the

air

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Air Force

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force

.

Hence

, they should

be joined

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join

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the military

force

as

men

because they have more skills and workforce in the army than

men

. In conclusion,

women

should be allowed to join the army

force

as

men

because they are the

master

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masters

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in multi-tasking

as well

as

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and

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they should

treat

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be treated

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like

men

, which

gender

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is gender

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equality. Henceforth, I strongly agree

with

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that

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the

airforce

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Air Force

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should be allowed to join

women

like

men

.