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The line graph shows the percentage of different age groups of cinema visitors in a particular country. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows the percentage of different age groups of cinema visitors in a particular country. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line chart illustrates the percentage of four age groups of cinema visitors in a
specefic
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specific
 country from 1978 to 2008.
Overall
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, all of
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the ages
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ages
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age
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 groups decreased markedly
expect
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except
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in
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for
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 age fifty plus
that
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which
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incresed
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increased
. Before all of
lines
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the lines
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 fell between 1970 and 1988, the figure of all
lines
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the lines
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 rose until 1998. The line of age 14 to 24
remaind
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remained
remain
 fairly stable
the
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for the
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 next three years, after which the figure declined until the end of
period
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the period
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whe
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when
 it reached 80%.

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Linking words: Add more linking words.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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