The line graph shows the percentage of different age groups of cinema visitors in a particular country. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows the percentage of different age groups of cinema visitors in a particular country. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line chart illustrates the number of film watchers in various age
groups
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from 1978 to 2008. There are four different
groups
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including youngsters, aged between 14 and 24, 25 to 34, 35 to 49, and beyond 50 years old. Units are measured in percentage.
Overall
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, in 1978, the 14-24
group
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was the highest
group
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of cinema visitors with 90 per
cent
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, followed by those aged between 25 and 34 with 80 per
cent
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, which ranked
second,
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the 35-49
group
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with 60 per
cent
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, and the oldest
group
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with only 40 per
cent
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, respectively.
However
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, there was a downward
trend
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between 1978 and 1988. All age
groups
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dropped by around 20 per
cent
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but began to increase in 1998. From 1998 to 2003, each separate age
group
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of movie visitors has a constant
trend
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. In 2008, the eldest
group
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, aged more than 50 years old, was the only
group
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that had a positive
trend
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rising from 40 per
cent
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to 50 per
cent
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, which was equal to the 35-49
group
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,
while
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other
groups
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had a negative
trend
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. In conclusion, in 2008, the youngest
group
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still had the highest number of film audiences but the number decreased from 90 per
cent
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to 80 per
cent
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.
Similarly
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the 25 to 34 range and 35 to 49 range reduced in the same way.
On the other hand
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, the eldest range became more popular by having an upward
trend
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.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words groups, group, cent, trend with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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