The bar chart shows the percentage of adults who were overweight or obese (too fat or much too fat) in one country from 1965 to 2015. The pie chart shows the proportion of adults who were overweight, obese or severely obese in 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

IELTS Writing Task Chart for The bar chart shows the percentage of adults who were overweight or obese (too fat or much too fat) in one country from 1965 to 2015. The pie chart shows the proportion of adults who were overweight, obese or severely obese in 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The
bar
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chart
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shows
trend
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the trend
a trend

The noun phrase trend seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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of
adults
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who were overweight or obese in
country
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the country

The noun phrase country seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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between 1965 and 2015 and the pie
chart
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demonstrate
Correct subject-verb agreement
demonstrates

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the contribution of
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adults
Change noun form
adults'
adult's

It seems that this noun form may be incorrect.

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different
situation
Fix the agreement mistake
situations

It seems that situation may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

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of fatness in 2015. As it shows in 1965, we
have
Wrong verb form
had

It appears that your sentence or clause uses an incorrect form of the verb have. Consider changing it.

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the
least
Correct word choice
lowest

There may be an adjective issue here.

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percentage of overweighting
adults
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

that it’s just under 50
percent
Change the spelling
per cent

The spelling of percent is a non-British variant. For consistency, consider replacing it with the British English spelling.

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and we can see in
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bar
Correct article usage
the bar

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chart
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which
Correct word choice
that

It seems that conjunction use may be incorrect here.

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in 2015 just over a third part of
adults
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are
Wrong verb form
were

It appears that your sentence or clause uses an incorrect form of the verb are. Consider changing it.

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too fat. As we can see,
although
Linking Words

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bar
Correct article usage
the bar

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chart
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has
a
Change the article
an

The article a may be incorrect. Consider changing it to agree with the beginning sound of the following word increasing.

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increasing trend during these 50 years
but
Remove the conjunction
apply

It appears that the word but is unnecessary in this sentence. Consider removing it.

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in
three
Correct article usage
the three

It seems that there is an article usage problem here.

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decade
Change to a plural noun
decades

The singular noun decade follows a number other than one. Consider changing the noun to the plural form.

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from 1965 to 1975 the trend is
in
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apply

It seems that preposition use may be incorrect here.

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stable
Add an article
a stable

The noun phrase stable form seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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form and the percentage of mature people
are
Correct subject-verb agreement
is

It seems that the verb are does not agree with the subject. Consider changing the verb form.

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so
Rephrase
very

There may be an adverb issue here.

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similar to each other just around 50
percent
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per cent

The spelling of percent is a non-British variant. For consistency, consider replacing it with the British English spelling.

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.
Linking Words
Linking Words
Furthermore
Add a comma
Furthermore,

It appears that you are missing a comma after the introductory phrase Furthermore. Consider adding a comma.

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in
2015
Add a comma
2015,

It appears that you are missing a comma after the introductory phrase Furthermore in 2015. Consider adding a comma.

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the number reached
to
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apply

It seems that preposition use may be incorrect here.

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the maximum point that around 80
percent
Change the spelling
per cent

The spelling of percent is a non-British variant. For consistency, consider replacing it with the British English spelling.

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of
adults
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

have
fatness
Replace the word
fat

The word fatness doesn’t seem to fit this context. Consider replacing it with a different one.

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. The pie charts demonstrate that in 2015 which is the highest percentage of fatness, 34% of people are too fat. And only 29% of people have a healthy diet. One in twenty
of
Change preposition
apply

It seems that preposition use may be incorrect here.

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adults
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

have
Correct subject-verb agreement
has

It seems that the verb have does not agree with the subject. Consider changing the verb form.

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dangerous fat. The
bar
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

chart
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

shows that being fat and
have
Unnecessary verb
apply

The verb have appears to be unnecessary here.

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overweight
is
Verb problem
has

There may be a verb use issue here.

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increased decade by decade and the pie
chart
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

demonstrate
Change the verb form
demonstrates

The plural verb demonstrate does not appear to agree with the singular subject the pie chart. Consider changing the verb form for subject-verb agreement.

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that just over a third of
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Correct article usage
the adults
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Correct article usage
the adults

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adults
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adult
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population are in a healthy or underweight part.

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Contractions: Don't use contractions.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words bar, chart, adults with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 7 times.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.
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