You would like a job working in the summer camp which runs sports and outdoor activities for children and young people. Write a letter to the organisers of the summer camp. In your letter: describe your personality say what relevant experience and skills you have explain what sort of work you would like to do.

#job #summer #camp #sports #activities #children #people #organisers #personality #skills #sort #work

✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?

Dear Sir, I hope

this

Linking Words

letter finds you in best of the spirits and radiant health. I am writing

this

Linking Words

letter to let you know that I am interested in doing a job at the summer camp organised by you. I am a professional Cricket player, currently,

studing

Correct your spelling

studying

Sports

Use synonyms

Physiology at National College. I am a

sports

Use synonyms

enthusiast and I am a very competitive individual. I played a few

state level

Add a hyphen

state-level

show examples

tournaments and performed well on many occasions for my team. My team management always

rely

Change the verb form

relies

show examples

on me for my consistency and never

loosing

Replace the word

losing

show examples

atitude

Correct your spelling

altitude

attitude

Moreover

Linking Words

, being a student of

sports

Use synonyms

physio course, I am giving my services at a local football club, which trains junior players. I

got

Verb problem

have

show examples

a few years of experience in treating minor

sports

Use synonyms

injuries, which

happens

Correct subject-verb agreement

happen

show examples

while

Linking Words

playing on the field. In the end, I could prove to be an asset

for

Change preposition

show examples

you because

this

Linking Words

camp is organised for young ones and teenagers. Most likely, in order to, perform well they usually ended up hurting themselves.

Therefore

Linking Words

, I could treat them to get better soon and teach them how to avoid

such

Linking Words

incidents because of my experience at the football club. I hope you will give me a chance to serve you and I am looking forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Jatinder.

Submitted by mrsdns on Sun Sep 08 2024

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

task achievement

Your response is complete and addresses all parts of the task. However, you could improve by giving more specific examples and details regarding your experiences.

coherence cohesion

Your letter has a logical structure but can be improved with clearer paragraph breaks and transitions. Ensure each paragraph has a single main idea.

coherence cohesion

Your greeting and closing are appropriate and polite. This adds a professional touch to your letter.

task achievement

Your letter maintains a suitable and respectful tone throughout, making it appropriate for a formal job application.

5
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

0123456789.0505

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

219 words

🚀 Prepare for IELTS writing section today!

Unlimited Task 1 & Task 2 checks
Practice with essays, charts, and letters.
Personalized suggestions & mistake analysis
Spot every mistake and boost your score.
Topic ideas & vocabulary helpers
Expand your ideas and use the right words.
Progress tracking
Watch your writing improve with every practice.

What to do next:

Look at other essays:

4.5
band
Many developing countries are currently expanding their tourist industries. Why is this the case? It is a positive or negative development?
In the modern times, many developing countries all over the world tend to largen and promote their tourist industries. There are some realistic reasons of this issue; personally, however, I think this is a negative development for this countries themselves.
7
band
Art classes, such as painting and drawing, are as important as other subjects to a child’s development, and they should be compulsory in high school. To what extent do you agree or disagree
It is widely believed that art classes, such as drawing are as essential as other subjects for the development of a child, and people are convinced that these subjects should be made compulsory in schools. This essay will first explore the importance of these classes for character formation and then discuss why making it mandatory is also crucial. After considering both viewpoints, I will present my own opinion on this statement.
5.5
band
It is becoming more and more difficult to escape the influence of the media on our lives. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of living in a media-rich society.
Nowadays , Media has become essential for human beings, it seems life is incomplete without it . I personally believe that it plays an important role in day to day life of an individual .This essay will discuss both sides by taking examples from the newspaper and a journal.
7.5
band
Write a letter to the gym manager. In your letter ask what types of membership are available, and what the prices are ask what activities are available ask what the joining procedure is
I am inscribing this missive to inquire about the details of you premises subscription charges.
6.5
band
Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today’s world, subjects like Science and Technology are more important than History. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion?
Nowadays, many people agree that History is one of the most essential subjects in school. Others agree that subjects like Science and Technology are more necessary than History. This essay will discuss both views on whether History or subjects like Science and Technology are more important.

Many developing countries are currently expanding their tourist industries. Why is this the case? It is a positive or negative development?

Art classes, such as painting and drawing, are as important as other subjects to a child’s development, and they should be compulsory in high school. To what extent do you agree or disagree

It is becoming more and more difficult to escape the influence of the media on our lives. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of living in a media-rich society.

Write a letter to the gym manager. In your letter ask what types of membership are available, and what the prices are ask what activities are available ask what the joining procedure is

Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today’s world, subjects like Science and Technology are more important than History. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion?