The graph below shows food consumption in Australia between 1950 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows food consumption in Australia between 1950 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph illustrates the amount of food consumed in two time periods in Australia.
Overall
,
quantity
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the quantity
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of Bread, Fruit and vegetables has increased from 1950 to 2010 albeit in different
range
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except for meat which decreased and seafood was almost constant. Vegetables and fruits are the most popular and seafood is the least. Vegetables
was
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the most year consumed food type in
year
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1950 and despite
of
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some fluctuation in
1960s
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the 1960s
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and 1980s it was the most eaten in 2010 with 160
kg
per person.
Fruit
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The fruit
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which was at 80
Kg
for
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an
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average in 1950,
also
dropped by 5
kg
in
1960s
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and
then
it increased significantly
with
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140
kg
per citizen in 2010. Bread consumption in
first
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decade was 40
kg
after constant fluctuation for
next
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60 years it was at 60
kg
In 2010. Meat
starting
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with the second most eaten item with 110
kg
per
residents
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but was almost constant before rising in 1990 and dropped significantly in 2010.
However
, seafood was the only food which
remain
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constant for the 60-year time period before showing very minute ups and downs.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words kg with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuating trend
  • dietary preferences
  • staple foods
  • health awareness
  • rising health concerns
  • shift towards healthier eating habits
  • intake
  • notable trend
  • significant feature
  • consumption
  • reflecting changing
  • availability
  • a decline towards
  • initially increased
  • steady rise
  • marked decrease
  • period of stability
  • dramatically
  • a sharp rise
  • gradual change
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