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The graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line chart provides data about the number of
goods
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 transferred using
road
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,
water
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,
rail
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 and
pipeline
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 in the UK from 1974 to 2002.
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, there were significant upward trends in the amount of
goods
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 transported using
road
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,
water
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 and
pipeline
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,
while
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 the quantities of
goods
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for
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by
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rail
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 saw
a decrease trends
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a decrease trend
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 and ended with a marginal increase in 2002. The quantities of
goods
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 transported using
road
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 witnessed the highest amount compared to
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pipeline
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the pipeline
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 which was the lowest. The
goods
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 travelled by
road
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 started at 70
million
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tonnes
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 in 1974,
then
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 there was fluctuation over the period, at which it reached just under 100
million
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tonnes
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 in 2002.
On the other hand
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,
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pipeline
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pipelines
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 started
around
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at around
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5million
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5 million
tonnes
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 in 1974 and gradually increased to just over
20million
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20 million
tonnes
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 in 2002. Looking
further
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 down, both
water
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 and
rail
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 modes had a close start at around 40
million
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tonnes
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 in 1974 and remained steady in the next four years.
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, both had
a different trends
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a different trend
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 beginning
1978
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in 1978
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.
Water
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 increased extra 20
million
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tonnes
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 reaching
to
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60
million
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 from 1978 to 1982 and it remained stable until 1990.
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 it went down to about 50
million
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tonnes
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 in 1998 and jumped to around 63
million
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tonnes
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 in 2002.
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,
rail
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 had fluctuations which considerably dropped to around 25
million
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tonnes
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 in 1994 and it rose to just above 40
million
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tonnes
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 in 2002.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words goods, road, water, rail, pipeline, million, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Overview
  • Trend
  • Fluctuation
  • Peak
  • Trough
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Stability
  • Mode of transport
  • Quantity
  • Comparison
  • Goods
  • Transported
  • Significant
  • Noticeable
  • General trend
  • Time span
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