he charts below show the percentages of men and women aged 60-64 in employment in four countries in 1970 and 2000 Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

he charts below show the percentages of men and women aged 60-64 in employment in four countries in 1970 and 2000

Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.
The
given
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bar graph illustrates the percentages of
male
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males
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and
female
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females
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of 60-64
years
old in employment in countries named Australia, Japan, the USA and Belgium in
years
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the years
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1970 and 200.
Overall
, it can be observed that the
job holding
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job-holding
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rate of
man
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men
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was much higher than females in both the
years
.
Firstly
, in all the four different nations in 1970, the employment rate of males where above 70. Which reduced in 2000 with Belgium being
the
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significant decrease of 60%. Australia
expirienced
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experienced
the
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a
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diminish of 27
percent
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per cent
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while
,
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apply
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the USA went from 73% to 55%. Japan showed
least
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the least
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difference in employment with only
8
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an 8
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% reduction in 30
years
.
On the other hand
,
women
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women's
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emloymnet
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employment
rate was
quiet
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quite
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stable. Australia and the USA demonstrated
rise
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a rise
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of 1% and 2% respectively. Japan and Belgium displayed
fall
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a fall
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of 3% and 1% respectively as it went from 43% to 40% and 8% to 7% sequentially.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words years with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentages" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Employment rate
  • Percentage
  • Significant increase/decrease
  • Fluctuation
  • Gender disparity
  • Trend
  • Decline
  • Improvement
  • Variation
  • Noteworthy
  • Aligned
  • Comparative analysis
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