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The graph below shows the amount of UK investments in clean energy from 2008 to 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the amount of UK investments in clean energy from 2008 to 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart depicts the amount of clean
energy
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investment
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 in the UK from 2008 to 2015. It is clear from the graph that
the
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wind
energy
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 consumed the highest
investment
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 compared to other
energy
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.
According to
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 what is shown , the expenditure
of
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the
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wind
energy
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 was nearly 1
million
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 which increased by 6
million
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 in 2009 and from 2009 to 2014 the amount of
investment
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of
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in
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 wind
energy
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was fluctuated
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fluctuated
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 after that
reached
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 about 14
million
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 in 2015 .
On the other hand
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 , the solar
investment
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 in 2010 represented the lowest amount compared to other years
while
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 in 2014 rocketed to the highest which was
4miilion
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4 million
. As
whole
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a whole
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 the
energy
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 consumption of smart technology was around 5
million
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 between 2009 to 2014
then
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 climbed to 13
million
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 .
However
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, other
energy
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 investments which was 15bn .

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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, investment, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "amount" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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