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The graph below shows the amount of UK investments in clean energy from 2008 to 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the amount of UK investments in clean energy from 2008 to 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart depicts the amount of clean
energy
investment
 in the UK from 2008 to 2015. It is clear from the graph that
the
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wind
energy
 consumed the highest
investment
 compared to other
energy
.
According to
 what is shown , the expenditure
of
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on
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the
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wind
energy
 was nearly 1
million
 which increased by 6
million
 in 2009 and from 2009 to 2014 the amount of
investment
of
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in
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 wind
energy
was fluctuated
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fluctuated
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 after that
reached
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reaching
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 about 14
million
 in 2015 .
On the other hand
 , the solar
investment
 in 2010 represented the lowest amount compared to other years
while
 in 2014 rocketed to the highest which was
4miilion
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4 million
. As
whole
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 the
energy
 consumption of smart technology was around 5
million
 between 2009 to 2014
then
 climbed to 13
million
 .
However
, other
energy
 investments which was 15bn .
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, investment, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "amount" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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