The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in sir cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in sir cities.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table illustrates
that
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apply
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details about the
under ground
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underground
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railway systems in six different cities worldwide namely
London
,Paris,Tokyo,Washington DC and Los
Angels
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Angeles
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.
Overall
, it is clearly evident that
London
has the oldest railways and
take
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takes
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longest
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the longest
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journey compared to other cities,
whereas
the newest is Los
Angels
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Angeles
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. The major number of
passengers
travel in through the underground train in Tokyo. The first underground railway station was made in
London
in 1863,
it
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its
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route takes 394Km and 775 million
passengers
travel per year. The Station in Washington DC was built in 1976 ,which recorded only 144 million
travelers
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travellers
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per year that far lower
passengers
over in
London
.
Eventhough, in
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Even though
Los
Angels
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Angeles
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station
laydown
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lay down
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recently
that
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has only 11 Km of
journey
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the journey
a journey
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, which is the shortest than others.
Largest
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The largest
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number of
passengers
travel in Tokyo, which
is accounted
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accounts
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1927
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million per year.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words london, passengers with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • underground railway system
  • route length
  • annual passengers
  • opening date
  • established
  • network
  • passenger numbers
  • comparison
  • geographical location
  • urban transit
  • infrastructure
  • length of the route
  • serve
  • capacity
  • system expansion
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