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The line graph shows the monthly download trends of four popular language learning apps from January 2013 to mid-2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows the monthly download trends of four popular language learning apps from January 2013 to mid-2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph depicts the trend in the popularity of the four popular language learning apps by showing the
number
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 of their downloads per month. The app called Speak
light
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Light
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 was originally competing with Linguoso
in
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at
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 the beginning of 2013,
however
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, the download
number
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 gradually decreased over time and now it ends up with the third
within
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among
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 the four apps. Linguoso had the highest
number
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, 30 thousand downloads per month, in January 2013, but its popularity plummeted in the
last
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 four months of 2013, and gradually recovered to become the second. Verb Tester has been stable but the
number
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 of
the
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apply
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downloads
were
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was
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 almost always low compared to the other competitors.
Finally
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, we can see
the
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a
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 significant rise in the
number
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 of 20Words since its launch in September 2013. The application overwhelmed the others and is now the first doubling the
number
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 of the
second,
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Linguoso. It seems that 20Words deprived the share of Speak Light during the first half of 2014 and attracted
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further
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more
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 potential users who had not been using any app until 20Words
got
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became
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 popular.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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