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The line graph shows the number of books that were borrowed in four different months in 2014 from four village libraries, and the pie chart shows the percentages of books, by type, that were borrowed over this time

The line graph shows the number of books that were borrowed in four different months in 2014 from four village libraries, and the pie chart shows the percentages of books, by type, that were borrowed over this time
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The line graph shows the number of
books
 borrowed from four village libraries over a period of four months,
while
 the pie chart illustrates the distribution of different types of
books
 borrowed.
Overall
, Ryeslip
library
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Library
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 experienced a significant decrease in borrowings,
while
 West Eaton and Church Mount saw substantial increases. In terms of book types, fiction was the most borrowed,
whereas
 self-help
books
 were the least popular. In more detail, Ryeslip
library
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Library
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 had the highest number of
books
 borrowed in June, with around 300
books
.
However
,
this
 figure steadily declined to just over 150 by September.
In contrast
, both West Eaton and Church Mount started at a modest 50
books
 in June but witnessed a sharp increase, reaching approximately 150
books
 by September. Sutton Wood,
on the other hand
, displayed a fluctuating trend, beginning with 250
books
 in June, dipping to 100 in August, and
then
 rising dramatically to 300 in September. As for the types of
books
 borrowed, fiction dominated the borrowing statistics, accounting for 43% of the total. History, science, and biography
books
 were moderately popular, making up between 14% and 19% each.
In contrast
, self-help
books
 were the least borrowed category, representing only 10% of the total.
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