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The chart and graph below give the information about three categories of workers in Australia and unemployment levels within those categories.

The chart and graph below give the information about three categories of workers in Australia and unemployment levels within those categories.
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The line graph and pie chart provide information about occupational status and unemployment in Australia for three groups of people segmented into Australians,
non-Australians
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non-Australian
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 native English speakers and Non-native English speakers.
Bar
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 chart and line graph present the percentage of workforce and jobless people respectively for a decade from 1993 to 2003. Looking from an
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 perspective, the rate of unemployment for each group declined throughout the decade.
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, the majority portion of
workforce
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the workforce
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 belonged to Australians.
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 with the pie chart, it is readily apparent that employees who
was
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 born in Australia owned the majority part of job positions made up 76%. In stark contrast, NESC had a small portion of
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 community
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 ESC accounted for 14% and 10% respectively. Moving to the line graph, NESC and Australians had fluctuating patterns,
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, the general trend illustrated a slight decline throughout the decade. Despite the fact that ESC had
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the higher
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 initial amount of unemployment in comparison with
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the two
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 others, its plummeting
behavior
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 is significant in
a
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way that the final number approximately met the NESC’s and Australians’
last
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 number.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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