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The pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuel force in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuel force in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The charts display
units
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 of
electricity
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 produced by various sources in two different countries (
Australia
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 and
France
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) in the years 1980 and 2000.
Overall
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, the total
production
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 of
electricity
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 doubled in 20 years in
France
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 when
Australia
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 reached 170
units
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 in total
production
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 with an increase of 70%. Both countries had 4 main sources which were coal, oil, natural
gas
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, and
hydro
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hydropower
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power
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 to produce
electricity
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. Unlike
Australia
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,
France
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 produced electrical
power
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 from nuclear sources in both 1980 and 2000. In
Australia
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, coal was the main source
by
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of
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 producing half of the total
production
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 of
electricity
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 in 1980. In 2000, it strengthened its first position and had just over two-thirds proportion of produced
energy
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. Hydropowerpower and natural
gas
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 were following the leader with 20% of
energy
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production
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 each in 1980.
Hydropowerpower
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Hydropower power
 slightly increased to 36
units
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 of
production
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while
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 natural
gas
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 dramatically decreased to only 2
units
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 of
electricity
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production
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.
On the other hand
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, in
France
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, coal and natural
gas
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 produced the same amount of
energy
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 with 20
units
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 in 1980. The amounts of produced
energy
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 by oil and nuclear
power
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 followed
with
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by
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 20
units
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 and 15
units
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 respectively. The
energy
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production
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 caused by natural
gas
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 decreased dramatically to only 2
units
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 whilst the amount of
energy
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occured
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produced
 by coal remained the same with 25
units
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 in 2000.
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, the most significant source was nuclear
power
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 with over two-thirds of total
energy
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 produced in 2000.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words units, electricity, australia, france, production, gas, power, energy with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
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