The line graphs show the proportion of the population living in the cities across four different countries in Asia between 1970 and 2020, and expected to 2040, with 10-year intervals.

The line graphs show the proportion of the population living in the cities across four different countries in Asia between 1970 and 2020, and expected to 2040, with 10-year intervals.
The line graphs show the proportion of the
population
living in the cities across four different countries in Asia between 1970 and 2020, and expected to 2040, with 10-year intervals.
Overall
, it can be seen that Malaysia has the largest
population
over the period.
Similarly
, Indonesia showed a great increase, ending in second place. The
Philippines
and Indonesia rose gradually, with a lower number. In 1970, Malaysia had 30% of citizens staying in the city and
then
increased substantially to over 70% in 2020,
moreover
, it is predicted to rise consistently, exceeding the others in the end. The
Philippines
showed the greatest positive change in the given period, starting at the lowest percentages of roughly 12% in 1970 to 50% in 2020, and expected to surpass the remaining countries at above 60% in 2040.
However
, the
Philippines
began with the highest percentages at over 30% , it
forecasts
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is forecasted
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to be at approximately 50% in
the
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20 years future.
While
Thailand started at just below 20%, unfortunately, it was predicted to have the lowest
population
in the end, accounting for 43%. In summary,
while
the
Philippines
had the largest
population
in the capital throughout the period, Indonesia showed the greatest rise. Meanwhile, the
Philippines
and Thailand showed a minimal incline compared to the other two.
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