You are a student at a University in the UK. You have recently lost your University ID Card. Write to the local police station giving details of: who are you? what happened? Ask to record your details so that you can apply a new ID card.

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Dear Sir, I hope you are doing well. I am writing

this

letter to inform you about my university

card

that has been stolen or may have been lost somewhere in the

last

week. My name is Ahtsham wakeel. Currently, I am a student in the dental department at Bradford University .

Additionally

, I belong to Pakistan and have the nationality of Pakistan. Nowadays, I have been on a student visa in the United Kingdom for the

last

2 years. Three days ago , I went to the town centre with my roommate, to buy some grocery items. Unfortunately, for payment

purpose

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purposes

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, I pull out my wallet to pick up my

card

. I found that my university

card

was not there in my wallet. I checked here and there but all waste.

This

card

has the utmost importance in my daily chores. It is my humble request to record my details and issue a report

card

. So that I would be able to apply for a new one as soon as possible.

Otherwise

this

loss of mine will have detrimental effects on my studies. I eagerly waiting to hear from you. yours sincerely,

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task achievement

Your letter covers all necessary points, but try to keep the paragraphs concise and to the point for better clarity. For example, details about your nationality and visa status could be shortened.

coherence cohesion

Ensure every paragraph contains a single idea for clearer communication. For example, the information related to the incident should be in one paragraph, and your request in another.

coherence cohesion

It would help to review the use of prepositions and article usage to avoid small grammatical inaccuracies, e.g., 'for payment purpose' should be 'for payment purposes' and 'record my details and issue a report card' can be clearer as 'record my details and issue a report'.

task achievement

You have provided all necessary information including your identity, what happened, and what you request from the police.

task achievement

Your letter maintains a formal tone appropriate for the context.

coherence cohesion

The greeting and closing are appropriate and polite.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1
Grammar mistakes
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

193 words

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You are a student at a University in the UK. You have recently lost your University ID Card. Write to the local police station giving details of: who are you? what happened? Ask to record your details so that you can apply a new ID card.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Today there are many people who are overweight. Give reasons for this and give solutions to fix the problem.

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People's shopping habit depends more on the age group they belong to than other factors. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for spots or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.