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You stayed in a rental apartment during your trip last year and were generally satisfied with it. However, there was one issue that you encountered. You are planning another trip and would like to rent the same apartment again. Write a letter to the owner. In your letter: · Express your interest in renting the apartment again. · Mention the problem you faced during your last stay. · Provide details about your upcoming trip and ask about the availability of the apartment.

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Dear Sir or Madam, I’m writing
this
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 letter to inform you about my planned trip
in
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to
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 Malta and
the
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my
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 wish to rent an
apartment
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. I rented the
apartment
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 at Volkin Street, 13
last
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 year and was satisfied with the living conditions. I liked
this
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 place.
Firstly
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, It was a great location and good public transport availability. There were a lot of supermarkets and sights near the
apartment
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 and it was really convenient to save time.
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, the distance from the
apartment
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 to the sea is 500 meters and it’s
pleasure
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a pleasure
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 to walk to the sea.
A
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 beach in
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 place was amazing with clean soft sand and few people.
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, I faced one problem on my
last
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 stay. The air conditioner in my flat worked intermittently. I slept without air conditioner for several nights and it was terrible because it was July and 35 degrees outside. There was a fan but it didn’t improve
for
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my condition. I hope you
fixed
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fix
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this
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 problem and we will be able to enjoy our travel. We
gonna
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are going
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 to travel from the 15th of June to the 15th of August and we would like to rent the same
apartment
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.
Pleas
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Please
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 let me know in the near future if it is availability to rent
such
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 a flat. I look forward to hearing from you soon. Yours faithfully, Nadezhda Eliseeva.
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language
Improve grammatical accuracy by revising minor errors for better clarity.
organization
Structure the letter more clearly by creating distinct paragraphs for each main point.
tone
The letter has a clear and polite tone, suitable for a formal request.
content
The purpose of the letter and the details of the previous stay and upcoming trip are clearly conveyed.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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