A flow chart shows the process of processing wool into cloth. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting main features and make comparisons where relevant.

A flow chart shows the process of processing wool into cloth. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram illustrates the various stages in the
process
of producing
wool
products using sheep
wool
. It
is
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clearly illustrates, how sheep
wool
is produced as
a
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cloths
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cloth
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.
This
process
undergoes nine stages.
while
,
its
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it
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starts with shearing the
wool
, it ends with yarn.
Firslty
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First
,
wool
is sheared from the sheep which is suitable for the
process
, after that
wools
are cleaned several times and dried .
Then
dried
wools
put
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into the machinery where
,
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spinning
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the spinning
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process
took place. After that
wools
are
separted
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separated
to
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into
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either string or
wool
.
Srings
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Springs
are went
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to the recycling
process
whereas
wools
are tufted.
Then
that
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they
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are stored in a safe place . Tufts are made of balls of yarn and
using
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to mould
jackts
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jackets
jacks
and carpets,
while
raw
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the raw
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yarn is used
to
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for
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knitting
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knit
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words process, wool, wools with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "illustrates" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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