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The pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuel force in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuel force in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given pie charts illustrate the number of electricity
units
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 by fuel resources in
Australia
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 and
France
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 between 1980 and 2000.
Overall
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, it can be clearly observed that
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 the major resources used in both
Australia
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 and
France
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 in 1980 were coal energy and natural gas, those in
Australia
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 became coal energy and Nuclear power in
France
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 in 2000.
To begin
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 with, in
Australia
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, the primary resource in order to produce electricity in 1980 was Coal, followed by Hydropower, Natural gas, and Oil, at roughly 50, 20, and 10
units
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, respectively.
Similarly
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, in 2000, the main resource remained Coal energy at 130
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. Interestingly,
Australia
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 has reduced Oil and natural gas use
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 than 90% compared with 1980. With regard to
France
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, the percentages of fuel sources used in 1980 were indifferent by using Coal and Natural in both 25
units
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.
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, in 2000, the
France
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 government stimulated Nuclear power, causing the main fuel source to increase dramatically from 15
units
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 to 126
units
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 within 20 year-periods.
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