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The chart below the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.

The chart below the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.
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The bar chart illustrates the value of one country's exports in different categories in the years 2015 and 2016. The table indicates the average change in each category of exports in 2016 associated with 2015. It is clear from the forms that the figures were close to each other.
According to
 what is depicted, the export of petroleum products was nearly 60
billion
. In 2016,
the
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export
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exports
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 had a small
increased
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, there was only
3
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%
increasing
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 in that duration. The country exported almost 57
billion
Of
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engineered goods in 2015. There was
obvious
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 change in the following year, the number reached to up
than
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60
billion
, and the rate change was 8.5% . In 2015, there were above than 40
billion
 gems and jewellery were exported, and the rate of
decreasing
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 was 5.18%. Agricultural products were almost
equaled
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. There was only
0.81
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%
increasing
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. The country exported nearly 25
billion
 of textiles in 2015.
In addition
, it exported more than 30
billion
 in the next year, so there was a big
growing
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 in the figure.
To sum up
, it can be said that the proportion of
export
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exports
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 was in an increasing case. Obviously, from the
table
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it is clear that
 all of the products
was
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 increasing
expect
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 in gems and jewellery.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • export value
  • trend analysis
  • anomalies
  • percentage change
  • sector analysis
  • global demand
  • domestic production
  • economic conditions
  • technological advancements
  • international regulations
  • economic growth
  • trade relations
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