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The charts below show changes in the proportion of energy produced from different resources in a country in 1985 and 2003. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. (Pie charts)

The charts below show changes in the proportion of energy produced from different resources in a country in 1985 and 2003. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. (Pie charts)
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The given pie charts illustrate the alter in the
percent
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percentage
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 of
energy
manufacture
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manufactured
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 from various natural
resources
 in a country between 1985 and 2003.
Overall
, there are five main
resources
take
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that take
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 a large part of the
energy
 produced in
this
 country,
such
 as oil, natural gas, nuclear, hydro, and coal, other
resources
 just
occupied
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occupy
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 a small portion. The percentage of using oil to produce
energy
 witnessed an
enourmous
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enormous
 occupation in both 1985 and 2008, despite which is decreased
it’s
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its
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 percentage from 52
percent
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per cent
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 to 39
percent
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per cent
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. Reversely, the
percent
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percentage
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 of
using
Verb problem
apply
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coal and
for
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apply
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energy
 manufactured increased considerably at the same time,
8
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from 8
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% to
appriximately
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approximately
 22%. Another significant
alterly
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alter
altered
 characteristic of the pie chart is the
dramatically
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dramatic
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 decrease
of
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in
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energy
 produced from nuclear power, 22% to just 8%, over the time span of 18 years. It is
obivious
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obvious
 that other sources
was
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apply
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frequently
change
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changed
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 over
the
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apply
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time, but it was not as remarkable as
that
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those
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in
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of
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 compared with the
transform
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transformation
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 of
three
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the three
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 above
resources
. Specifically, there
were
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was
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a
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apply
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remain
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remained
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 unchanged in the percentage of using Hydro to manufacture
energy
, stable
4
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at 4
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%, and the other
renewabie
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renewable
renewables
 was
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a slightly
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slightly
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slight
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 rise in the
percent
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percentage
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 of
energy
 manufactured from 1% to 4%.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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