The two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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pie chart below demonstrates the data about online sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and
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fallen
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moment food&beverage jumped for
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per cent
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per cent
falled
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per cent
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