The two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
This
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pie chart below demonstrates the data about online sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and Overview, we can see that sectors like video games and food&beverage have increased same
for
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certain
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a certain
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percentage
where
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whereas
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dlectronic&appliance and home
furnhings
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furnishings
sectors declined
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a significantly
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significantly
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significant
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percentage
In 2005
home
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the home
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furnhings
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furnishings
percentage
was
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25
percent
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and
food&beverage^s
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the food&beverage^s
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indicator was
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to 22percent they have dramatically increased
also
decreased with
same
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the same
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percentage
when home
furnhings
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furnishings
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fallen
falled
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fell
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to 15
percent
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per cent
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at
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moment food&beverage jumped
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from
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10
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to 32
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per cent
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Situation
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of video games and dlectronic&appliance was exactly the same with the information up in 2005 video
games^s
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games
percentage
growth
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grew
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for
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5
percent
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from 18 to 23
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but dlectronic&appliance vice versa
falled
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fell
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from 35 to 30
percent
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just
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and just
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by 5
percent
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, percent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • distribution
  • percentage
  • sector
  • sales figures
  • revenue
  • growth
  • decline
  • stable
  • significant
  • leading
  • least performing
  • comparison
  • trend
  • increase
  • decrease
  • online shopping
  • retail sectors
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