The two pie charts below show total world energy consumption and electricity generation for last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

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The charts

gives

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information about how

distrubuted

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distributed

the consumed

energy

and generated

electricity

in the all world.

Overall

while

the highest

energy

consumption

source was oil, it can be clearly seen that the majority of

electricity

provided

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by coal. It is obvious that the proportion of consumed oil was five

time

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greater than generated by oil distribution.

However

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the percentage of coal

consumption

is nearly 15% less than the

distrubiton

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distribution

of coal for

electricty

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electricity

generation.

Whereas

there was

category

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which name was Combustible and Renewable& Waste in total

energy

consumption

, there was no

such

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apply

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category in

electricity

production.

In addition

difference

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the difference

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between

consumption

and generation by hydro was

dramatical

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, which were 2.2 and 16.1 respectively.

On the other hand

, the proportion of consumed and generated by gas sources are nearly

same

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. Nuclear

energy

was one of the less consumed

energy

;

however

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the effect of nuclear

energy

when

generated

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generating

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electricity

was noteworthy with

the

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portion of 15.7%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".

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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, electricity, consumption with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
3
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
15
Grammar mistakes
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

157 words

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