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The graphs below show the trends in three boys and girls names which are currently in the UK. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs below show the trends in three boys and girls names which are currently in the UK. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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the most popular three names which were given to males and females in the UK between the years 1925 and 2000.
Overall
, the most common three names used for boys (Daniel, Oliver, and Alexander) and girls (Sophia, Isabella, and Emily) were chosen by over 8
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 parents in 2000. Except for Daniel, all of the five names were becoming more popular after 1975. In 1925, Daniel was the most common
name
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boys, and it started to decline in 1975 after increasing its popularity in 50 years. The other
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 for boys, Alexander, rose dramatically after 1975 and reached ten
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 babies, whilst Oliver fluctuated. There was a massive resurgence for the
name
 Oliver to around 11
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 in 2000 after receding to almost none in 1975.
On the other hand
, Emily was always the most famous
name
 for girls between the years 1925 and 2000. Despite a slight
decreasing
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 in 1950, it accelerated and reached
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around 11
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 parents. Isabella and Sophia were not used before 1975.
However
, in 2000, Isabella and Sophia were given
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around 11
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 and 9
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 to females respectively.
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