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Band 2.5

Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Half of the people consider that all university
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 should only study the subject they like, the other half think that they should learn a major that
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 related to
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 and useful,
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 science and technology and Artificial
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Intelligence
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 above because. in the
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 we
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 be replaced by robots and artificial
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intelligence
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) so studying
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 subject that would be useful in the
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was
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 not totally wrong. it is kind of important to
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the
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science and technology because
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 the modern era all of the payments would be electronics and cash
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 not necessary anymore, everyone
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 pay only with their
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 did not really
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 studying sciences stuff,
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 did not want to
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 the formula of
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the
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latin
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 names.
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 would take
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 major, business was
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 important for the
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 thought business would never
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 and keep improving in the
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 same as the technology. in my opinion, you should
learned
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subject
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a subject
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 that you really
liked
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,
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 and
useful
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 for the
future
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Coherence and Cohesion
Improve your introduction by clearly stating both views and your position more explicitly. For example, mention that you will discuss both perspectives before sharing your opinion.
Coherence and Cohesion
Use more linking words or phrases to enhance the flow of your essay, such as 'On one hand', 'However', 'In conclusion', etc.
Task Achievement
Try to avoid repetitive language and improve sentence variety to make your writing more engaging.
Task Achievement
Include more specific examples to support your arguments, which could strengthen your points and provide clarity.
Task Achievement
You show a clear understanding of the topic and present both views, which is important for a discussion essay.
Coherence and Cohesion
Your conclusion does well to summarize your opinion, integrating personal preference with practical considerations.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
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  • diversity in research
  • well-rounded education
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  • critical thinking skills
  • mental well-being
  • burnout
  • forced academic paths
  • job-ready
  • skills shortages
  • tech-driven economy
  • employment rates
  • changing job market
  • utilitarian subjects
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