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The charts below show the proportions of british students at one university in england who were able to speak other lanhuages in addition to english,in 2000 and 2010. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features , and make comoarison where relevent.

The charts below show the proportions of british students at one university in england who were able to speak other lanhuages in addition to english,in 2000 and 2010. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features , and make comoarison where relevent.
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The pie charts illustrate the percentages of college pupils from England, who can speak foreign languages other than English, between the years 2000 and 2010.
Overall
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, the proportion of British students, who speak other languages
in addition
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 to English, was higher in 2010 than
2000
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in 2000
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. In the first place,
Spanish speaking
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 people had
30
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a 30
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% share in 2000.
Then
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, it prevented its place by adding %5 more and
becaming
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becoming
 35% in 2010. The percentage of
the
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apply
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people, who speak German remained at the same level
with
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at
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 10%, whilst the proportion of
the
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apply
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pupils, who can not speak any other languages was
halven
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halved
 from 2000 to 2010. The share of people, who speak two other
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language
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languages
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, showed no differences,
while
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 the students
learned
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who learned
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 another
language
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 increased by 5% to 15%. In 2010, it can be seen that the ratio of the individuals, who speak another
language
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, was twice as much as only one
language
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speakers
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speaker
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 except for Spanish.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words language with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • significantly
  • increase
  • decrease
  • multilingual
  • bilingual
  • linguistic skills
  • global context
  • notable
  • trend
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