The chart below shows the proportion of staff employed by age in the public sector in the UK in 2015 and 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The chart below shows the proportion of staff employed by age in the public sector in the UK in 2015 and 2020. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
The pie charts illustrate the ages of people employed in the UK public sector during two years, 2015 and 2020.
Overall
,
while
the percentage of those employed in their 20s and 40s increased,
employment
for other
ages
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groups, particularly the over 50s, fell. Turning first to the younger age groups,
although
the
employment
of workers under 21 actually fell from 14% in 2015 to 12% in 2020, the
overall
percentage of workers under 30 actually rose because of the surge in the
employment
of 21-30-year-olds, which increased significantly from 23% to 33%.
Similarly
, the proportion of employees over the age of 40 climbed from 19% in 2015 to 28% by 2020.
However
, other groups saw quite significant falls in
employment
. For 31-40-year-olds, the
employment
figure plummeted from 21% in 2015 to just 11% by 2020, which represented a substantial drop of more than 50% in relative terms.
Likewise
, the
employment
of over 50s declined, though not by quite so much, standing at 23% in 2015 and 16% in 2020.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words employment with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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