The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about energy consumption in the USA since 1980, with projections until 2030. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about energy consumption in the USA since 1980, with projections until 2030. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.
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The chart illustrates the history and projections
the
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of the
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United States of
America of
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America's
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fuel consumption from 1980-
2030
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to 2030
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. It consists of petroleum, coal, natural gas, nuclear, solar or wind and hydropower. In 1980, three fuels, namely petroleum, coal and natural gas
standed
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stood
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at 35, 17 and 20
quadrillion
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units respectively. They had modest fluctuation over a period of 30 years.
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, in 2030, these three reached a
high
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number than others in 50, 30, and 25 units respectively.
Furthermore
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, nuclears began spending around 4
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of energy consumption
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and peaked at almost 10
quadrillion
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in 2030.
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, solar or wind and
water-power
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water power
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oscillate slightly around 5
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components.
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, Petrol and oil
is
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are
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the highest position and hydropower is the lowest
of
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energy consumption. From 1980 to 2005, there was a slight fluctuation in petrol and oil,
while
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in
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prediction rose dramatically until 2030.
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, hydropower remained
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constant
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in history and projection.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words quadrillion with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • energy consumption
  • trends
  • marked increase
  • dominant source
  • modest increase
  • projections
  • renewable energy
  • nuclear energy
  • noticeable decline
  • span
  • petroleum
  • natural gas
  • coal
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