The graphs below give information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by level of education for the years 2002 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs below give information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by level of education for the years 2002 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph illustrates the ownership of computers on
basis
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of population
as well as
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the basis
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of education from 2002 to 2010 time period.
Overall
,
percentage
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the percentage
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of
computer
holder
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holders
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have grown constantly with time and people with higher
level
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levels
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of education have the highest rate of
computer
ownership. More than half of the population
were having
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computers in 2002.
This
number
rose gradually with each year, and by, 2010
proportion
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the proportion
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of
computer
holder
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holders
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was 75%, giving
the
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rise of 20% in 8 year period. When we compare it
on
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level of education,
number
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a number
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of no high school diploma
student
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students
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having
laptop
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laptops
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in 2002
were
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15%, and by, 2010
this
number
reached
to
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more than 40%, which is even more than high school graduate
computer
owners in 2002, and it is slightly less than 40%.
However
, by 2010 the percentage reaches
to
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65%. 1 out of 2
student
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students
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in college were having
computer
in 2002 and now
this
number
has exceeded 35% in 2010.
Student
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Students
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with graduation and postgraduation
have
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had
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70% and 75% of
computer
holder
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holders
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in 2002 and in 2010
this
percentage was
and
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apply
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90% for graduates and just slightly less than 100% for postgraduates.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words computer, number with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consistent increase
  • growing reliance on technology
  • clear correlation
  • digital divide
  • notable growth
  • most pronounced disparity
  • gap reduced considerably
  • percentage growth
  • higher educational levels
  • educational groups
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