The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart above demonstrates the proportion of
females
and
males
who did physical activity regularly of distinct ages , inhabiting
in
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Australia, in 2010. In general,
females
are more physically active than all ages of
males
, except for that of the youngest
group
.
In addition
, the highest figure of men doing regular exercises can be seen in the
age
group
of 15 to 24,
while
that of women was shown in the
age
group
of 45 to 54. Looking first at the youngest
group
.
Although
52.8% of
males
doing
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regular exercises, only 47.7% of 15-to-24-year-old
females
doing
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the same things.
In addition
, the
differences
between the
two
genders in
age
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the age
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group
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groups
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of 25 to 34 and 55 to 64 are larger than that of the oldest
age
group
: 42.2% of men and 48.9%of women for the former
group
, 46.7% of
males
and 47.1% of
females
for the latter one. Noticeably, the
differences
between the
two
genders of the over-65-year-old
group
maintain the biggest one. Moving on to
two
groups
which
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the
differences
between the
two
genders are bigger than 10%: the 35-to-44-year-old
group
and
45-to-54-year-old
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the 45-to-54-year-old
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group
respectively. The
differences
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difference
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of
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men and women in the first
group
are
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13%, which exceeds that of the other
group
, approximately 10%.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Percentage
  • Australian men
  • Australian women
  • Age groups
  • Regular physical activity
  • Participated
  • Increased
  • Decreased
  • Proportion
  • Physically active
  • Gender difference
  • Engaged
  • Exercise
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