The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart above demonstrates the proportion of
females
and males
who did physical activity regularly of distinct ages , inhabiting in
Australia, in 2010.
In general, Change preposition
apply
females
are more physically active than all ages of males
, except for that of the youngest group
. In addition
, the highest figure of men doing regular exercises can be seen in the age
group
of 15 to 24, while
that of women was shown in the age
group
of 45 to 54.
Looking first at the youngest group
. Although
52.8% of males
doing
regular exercises, only 47.7% of 15-to-24-year-old Wrong verb form
do
females
doing
the same things. Wrong verb form
do
In addition
, the differences
between the two
genders in age
Add an article
the age
group
of 25 to 34 and 55 to 64 are larger than that of the oldest Fix the agreement mistake
groups
age
group
: 42.2% of men and 48.9%of women for the former group
, 46.7% of males
and 47.1% of females
for the latter one. Noticeably, the differences
between the two
genders of the over-65-year-old group
maintain the biggest one.
Moving on to two
groups which
the Correct pronoun usage
apply
differences
between the two
genders are bigger than 10%: the 35-to-44-year-old group
and 45-to-54-year-old
Correct article usage
the 45-to-54-year-old
group
respectively. The differences
Fix the agreement mistake
difference
of
men and women in the first Change preposition
between
group
are
13%, which exceeds that of the other Correct subject-verb agreement
is
group
, approximately 10%.Submitted by chaing12340627 on
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