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The map below shows the plan of a proposed new town.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The map below shows the plan of a proposed new town.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The map shows that there
is
Correct subject-verb agreement
are
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 a lot of
houses
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house areas
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area
Use synonyms
in
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on
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 all
the
Correct article usage
apply
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sides where
its
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it
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 can be proposed for a new town. As
its
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it's
it is
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 shown
in
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on
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 the North
side
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 that there is a housing
area
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in
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at
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 the top of the right and
industrial
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an industrial
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are
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is
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in
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at
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 the top left where both of them have
an
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apply
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access to
a
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apply
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Ring Roads, the
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opposite
oppiste
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opposite
side
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 in the south
also
Linking Words
 there is an industrial
area
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 in the right
side
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 and the left
side
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 there is housing
area
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along with
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 recreational
Area
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 , i
Moreover
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, if
i
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I
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 see the East
side
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 and west
side
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 there is only
Housing
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a Housing
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area
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crosses
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that crosses
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with
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from
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Roards
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Roads
,
Parkings
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parking
, Bus Stations and recreational
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area
Fix the agreement mistake
areas
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. at
last
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 ,
i
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I
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 will choose to have a new town
in
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on
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west
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the west
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side
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 as
its
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it
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 is far from the industry
area
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 and near to the Bus station , Parkings and Recreational
Area
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 that will
me
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be
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 more
easir
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easier
 for the
preson
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person
 who lives there to have
a
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apply
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clear access and far away from the pollution .

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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area, side with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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