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You have completed the test! Below is the time you have spent on the activity. Time spent TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. Write at least 150 words. After you finish, use the checklist to evaluate your writing task. Then, compare your task with the sample answer. The chart below shows the average household spending pattern for households in three income categories as a proportion of their income. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You have completed the test! Below is the time you have spent on the activity. Time spent TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. Write at least 150 words. After you finish, use the checklist to evaluate your writing task. Then, compare your task with the sample answer. The chart below shows the average household spending pattern for households in three income categories as a proportion of their income. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart illustrates various components
people
 spend money on household activities corresponding to their
income
 in percentage.
Overall
, Housing is the category on which most spending is done by all
range
Fix the agreement mistake
ranges
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 of household
income
 and
least
Correct article usage
the least
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 spent is on eating out.
For the
Change preposition
The
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people
 who have
earns
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earned
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 more than $150,000 spend the most on housing with slightly less than one-third
their
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of their
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 money followed by retirement
saving
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savings
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with
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at
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 17%. They spent 15% on transport which is
lesser
Correct word choice
less
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 than both low and
medium
Add a hyphen
medium-income
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income
people
.
On
Change preposition
In
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remaining
Correct article usage
the remaining
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 categories, they spent less than 10% of their earning. Low and
medium
Add a hyphen
medium-income
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income
 households
also
 spent the most on housing even slightly more than
high
Add a hyphen
high-income
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income
people
 with 28% spent. The second category
comes
Verb problem
apply
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is transport where we spent 17% and 18% respectively.
Similarly
, on food at home and utilities, less than 15% was used by
low
Correct your spelling
low-income
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income
 and less than 10% was spent by
medium
Correct word choice
apply
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those who
comes
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come
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 in
middle
Add an article
the middle
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 class.
Middle
Add an article
The middle
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 class spent 10% on retirement savings.
However
,
low
Correct word choice
the lower
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 class spent only 3% in
this
 category. Other categories like clothing, health,
education
Correct word choice
and education
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,
comes
Correct subject-verb agreement
come
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 under
10
Correct article usage
the 10
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% range, in which low and
middle range
Add a hyphen
middle-range
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people
 spend money.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, income with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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