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The supplied line chart compares the proportion of female employees in 4 nations, namely the US, France, Afghanistan and Korea, in 2 decades starting from 1985.

The supplied line chart compares the proportion of female employees in 4 nations, namely the US, France, Afghanistan and Korea, in 2 decades starting from 1985.
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The line graph illustrates the difference between the
number
 of worker women in the US, France, Afghanistan, and Korea over 20 years
staring
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starting
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 from 1985.
Overall
, it is clear to see that the
number
 of female employees
was
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increased in four countries during the period except for
afghanistan
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Afghanistan
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. On the one hand, at the beginning of 1985, the
number
 of women who were working in
US
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the US
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 and Korea had
incresed
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increased
 dramatically to
reached
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 about 60% and 35%
respectivelly
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respectively
.
While
 in France, it decreased slightly from 1985 to 1990
then
 it
was
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began to
rose
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significantilly
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significantly
.  On the
onther
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other
 hand, Afghanistan was the only country that
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 the minimum
number
 of women who had
working
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worked
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 among these four countries. At the start of 1985, the
number
 of
female
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females
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 who
was
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were
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wroking
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working
 was approximately 30%
then
 it
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had
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 a slight
increasing
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increase
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 and
reach
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reached
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 a peak in 1995 to
became
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 about 35%.
Moreover
, the line graph shows that there was a sharp
decreasing
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 to reach a trough
in
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 the end of the
peroid
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period
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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