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The graph below shows the unemployment rates in the UK, the rest of Europe and Japan from 1993 to 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the unemployment rates in the UK, the rest of Europe and Japan from 1993 to 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph delineates how the proportion of joblessness in 3 particular countries changed from 1993 to 2007. On the whole, it can be seen that
while
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 the UK and EU, despite some fluctuations, experienced a downward trend regarding the rate of unemployment, the figure for Japan saw a notable increase in the early survey
period
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, before going down later on.
To begin
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 with, there was a dramatic increase in the unemployment rate of the EU from over 8% to almost 12% in the
period
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 of 7 years from 1993 before decreasing to 10% in 1999.
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, that of the UK significantly decreased from 11% to 6% ,
whereas
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 its Japanese counterpart fluctuated at 3% in the said
period
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. As for the
period
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 from 1999 to 2003,
from
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only 3%, up to 6% of
Japanese
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the Japanese
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 population became unemployed.
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, the statistics soon improved, declining by 2% to 4% 4 years later. With regard to the unemployment rate in the UK and EU, both remained relatively stable during the
period
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 between 2001 and 2005, at approximately 5% and 8%, respectively.
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, the
last
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 2 years witnessed
shrinking
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a shrinking
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 disparity between the two, with the former climbing to 6%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 2 times.
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