The bar charts show the main reasons for study among students of different age groups and the amount of support they received from employers. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar charts show the main reasons for study among students of different age groups and the amount of support they received from employers.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar charts illustrate the major reasons for
study
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according to
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the
age
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of the student and the number of employers who support them in time and fee.
Overall
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, in the first figure which is related to the
study
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, for
career
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, the rates are going to decrease by increasing the
age
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but for
interest
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,
this
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process is completely reversed. In the second chart about employer support, most of the proportion is dedicated to those under 26.
To begin
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with,
according to
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the
study
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chart,
it is clear that
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nearly 80% of under 26 aged people
study
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for a
career
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,
whereas
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10% of them
study
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just for
interest
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.
On the other hand
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, if we look at the over 49 of the segment, we find out that 70% of these people
study
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for
interest
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in comparison with around 19% of their
study
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for a
career
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. To look at it in detail, in 40-49, both
career
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and
interest
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are equal at around 40%. In the second bar chart, it can be seen that over 60% of employers support the under-26
age
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group. The minimum amount of the 30-39
age
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group is around 34%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "according to".
Vocabulary: Replace the words study, age, career, interest with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • age group
  • primary reason
  • career development
  • personal interest
  • enjoyment
  • employer support
  • trends
  • patterns
  • motivation
  • lifelong learning
  • correlation
  • career goals
  • life circumstances
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