The chart below gives information on the birth rate among women in England, from 1973 to 2020. The figures are measured in births per 1000 women.

The chart below gives information on the birth rate among women in England, from 1973 to 2020. The figures are measured in births per 1000 women.
The line chart illustrates the
birth
rate
data between
women
in England from the year 1973 to 2020. Three out of the six age groups (under 20, 20-25, and 40 and more) had experienced a decline in the
rate
of
birth
. For the under 20-year-old female, it went from 60 births/1000
women
in 1973 to about 40 births/1000 in 2008.
Next,
the age group of 20-25 reached a
rate
of
birth
of nearly 93
birth
/1000 which was previously about 125 in the year of 1973.
Lastly
, for the
women
who are 40 and above, the
birth
rate
was steadily decreasing over the years till it landed up at almost 10 births/1000
women
in 2008.
However
, some groups had an incline with time. Ladies between the ages of 30 to 35 had a steady increase
whereas
the other group of
women
aged between 35 and 39 had a dramatic climb from 1988 till 1998 and after that, it faced a plateau.
Finally
, the ages of 25 to 29 had an obvious fluctuation over the period of time.
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