The line graph below shows the population size, birth rate and the death rate of England and Wales from 1700 to 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below shows the population size, birth rate and the death rate of England and Wales from 1700 to 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates the number of people and the birth percentage and the
death
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percentage in England and Wales between 1700 and 2000.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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the trend in the population size of both countries showed a significant increase during the given period.
While
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the birth and
death
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ratio fluctuated over the 400 years. Looking in more detail at the number of residents, in 1700 it began at under 5
million
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,
then
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experienced a considerable rise with 10
million
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in 1750 before
returned
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to under 5
million
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in 1800. There was rapid growth to a peak of 50,000,000 in 2000.
In contrast
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, the rate of birth was slightly higher than the
death
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rate,
fluctuated
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from 30
million
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in 1700 to reaching approximately 34% in 2000.
While
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the
death
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rate started at 25
million
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in 1700, over the 19th and 20th showed a decline, accounting for 20
million
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words death, million with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuations
  • stabilize
  • steep
  • advancements
  • notable
  • shift
  • norms
  • impact
  • critical factor
  • relatively stable
  • Industrial Revolution
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