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The diagrams below show the development of the village of Kelsbey between 1780 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show the development of the village of Kelsbey between 1780 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The illustration depicts the developmental
changes
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 that took place in the
village
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 of Kelsbey from
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year
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the year
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 1780 to
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year
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the year
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 2000. The image given shows the
changes
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 in the
village
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 made over three time
period
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periods
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; 1780, 1860 and 2000.
Overall
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, a drastic change has taken place in the
village
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 of Kelsbey if
years
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the years
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 1780 and 2000 are compared. There has been
addition
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the addition
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 of roads, expansion of homes and, development of
school
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schools
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, shops and sports fields. But at the same time, there is
elimination
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the elimination
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 of the
farms
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 and
woods
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 over the two centuries.
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 with, in
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year
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the year
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 1780, there was a
river
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 flowing from
north-west
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the north-west
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 to south west
side
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 of the
village
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.
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,
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apply
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 on the north-east
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side
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side,
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 there were only 100
home
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homes
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,
rest
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the rest
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 of the east
side
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 from north to south was covered by
woods
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. In the
center
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centre
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 of the
village
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, were
farms
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.
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, after almost a century, only
few
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changes
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 were noticed. A bridge was constructed over the
river
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, a road was built from the
river
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 extending from
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the north-east
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north-east
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northeast
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 to
north west
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north-west
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side
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 towards the residential area, and there was an addition of 100 homes. There seems to be a reduction in
number
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a number
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 of
farms
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 and
woods
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also
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.
In contrast
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 to 1780 and 1860, major
changes
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 are observed in
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year
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the year
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 2000. The total number of houses increased to 500 in
north-eastern
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the north-eastern
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side
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 only,
whereas
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 new construction of schools and sports field in
south-east
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the south-east
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 of the
village
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. A new road was built, connecting the homes to the school area. Shops are seen alongside the
river
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, in
south-west
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the south-west
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 part of the
village
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, and just adjacent to the shops is a wetland for birds. In
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year
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the year
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 2000, it is seen that there are no more
farms
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 and
woods
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words changes, village, year, farms, woods, river, side with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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