The diagrams below show the development of the village of Kelsbey between 1780 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show the development of the village of Kelsbey between 1780 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The illustration depicts the developmental
changes
that took place in the
village
of Kelsbey from
year
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1780 to
year
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2000. The image given shows the
changes
in the
village
made over three time
period
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periods
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; 1780, 1860 and 2000.
Overall
, a drastic change has taken place in the
village
of Kelsbey if
years
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the years
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1780 and 2000 are compared. There has been
addition
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the addition
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of roads, expansion of homes and, development of
school
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schools
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, shops and sports fields. But at the same time, there is
elimination
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the elimination
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of the
farms
and
woods
over the two centuries.
To begin
with, in
year
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1780, there was a
river
flowing from
north-west
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the north-west
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to south west
side
of the
village
.
Whereas
,
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on the north-east
side
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side,
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there were only 100
home
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homes
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,
rest
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the rest
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of the east
side
from north to south was covered by
woods
. In the
center
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centre
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of the
village
, were
farms
.
On the other hand
, after almost a century, only
few
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changes
were noticed. A bridge was constructed over the
river
, a road was built from the
river
extending from
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the north-east
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north-east
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northeast
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to
north west
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north-west
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side
towards the residential area, and there was an addition of 100 homes. There seems to be a reduction in
number
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a number
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of
farms
and
woods
also
.
In contrast
to 1780 and 1860, major
changes
are observed in
year
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2000. The total number of houses increased to 500 in
north-eastern
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the north-eastern
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side
only,
whereas
new construction of schools and sports field in
south-east
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the south-east
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of the
village
. A new road was built, connecting the homes to the school area. Shops are seen alongside the
river
, in
south-west
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the south-west
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part of the
village
, and just adjacent to the shops is a wetland for birds. In
year
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2000, it is seen that there are no more
farms
and
woods
.
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