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the bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age group who did regular physical activity in 2010

#bar #percentage #australian #men #women #age #group #activity
The supplied illustration depicts comparative information about
regularity
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the regularity
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 of physical activity
of
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in
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 Australian
men
’s and women’s
life
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lives
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 in 2010. A glance at the graphs reveals that women pay more attention to
their’s
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their
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 health,
moreover
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moreover,
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 we can see the statistics, where
is shown
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apply
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the level of activity of
men
,
which
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apply
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 is lower than women’s. Now,turning to the details.Males are more active
,
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apply
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 when
teenage
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the teenage
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years
is
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are
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 going.
While
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During
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this
 period
men
 have the highest percentage of physical activity.In comparison,
men
who’s
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whose
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 age is above 35-44
years
, had
dramatically
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a dramatically
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 low
precent
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per cent
 of doing sport.There are no
overwhelmingly
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overwhelming
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 differences between 25 and 64
years
, except the category of
men
, who
is
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are
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 35 to 44
years
 old. It can be clearly seen that women like doing physical exercises more.As proof, the chart shows
activeness
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the activeness
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 of women, whom’s age is more than 25
years
.
In contrast
, females
is
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are
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 less active at the period between 15 and 24
years
 old.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words men, years with synonyms.
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